Min Thuwan, Min Yuwai - Poetry Tricks

Chapter 1

When it is time to speak, a child learns to speak by imitating what adults say. When it is time for class, he learns to write by imitating the words the teacher shows him. When he enters the workplace, he learns to work by imitating what adults show him. It is customary to learn by imitating the way a person thinks, speaks, and works. Maung Tin Myint (Thandwe) thought that he was imitating someone else's poem when he was practicing composing the following poem.

Difference

Strong consultation.

The smile on his face

A silver-plated golden crescent.

When he hates, his face

For example, dark brown.

The juxtaposition of two opposites, a smile and a hate, is a fitting composition. The glory of light is revealed in the darkness. The glory of darkness is revealed in the light. The analogy of the moon and the clouds is also fitting. One is light, the other is darkness.

However, the composition seems out of proportion. It seems unbalanced. The balance seems unstable. I would like to encourage you to consider what would happen if the following were corrected.

When he smiles, his face

For example, Kyi Thara Moon.

When he hates, his face

It's like a dark blue cloud.

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It is a quality of a poet to be aware of what moves him. The subject may be serious or trivial. In any case, the subject that moves him is the seed that gives him the opportunity to write poetry. In writing the following verse, Maung Myo Myat has planted the seed that his emotional experience has given him.

It's funny.

If you meet in person

I want to tell you.

About love and kindness.

See you again.

Share your feelings.

It's a draw.

Sit down, sit down.

I haven't had the chance to say it yet.

It seems so difficult..

Many young people have experienced what Maung Myo Myat felt. However, they may not understand it as much as Maung Myo Myat did. They may not be able to express themselves in writing like Maung Myo Myat did. When they read Maung Myo Myat's poetry, they will say, "Yes, it is true." This is the courage of a poet.

Maung Myo Myat is commendable for writing with his heart and soul. However, if he can improve it even more, it will be even more commendable. The four-syllabled line is a strict rule. It is a type of writing that must be written with a literary tone. Therefore, Maung Myo Myat seems to have written the second paragraph with great restraint. However, in the first paragraph, the words “I want to say” are written like a piece of wood and bamboo. The phrase “I have not spoken” is not clear. It is weak. You also need to pay attention to the punctuation.

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Maung Myo Myat composed experience. Ko (Yangon University) tried to compose thought. Experience and thought are of different natures. Experience is experienced physically, so it is clear. But thought is the food of the mind, so it is complicated. The complexity is separated and cleaned up, and only when the solid structure is clearly visible can it be reconstructed. Only then can the ornaments such as polished roundels, polished edges, flower patterns, flower patterns, diamond rings, and diamond studs be properly placed and decorated in their proper places. “Read Ko’s Lanka.

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The life story of a little bird The eggshell courtyard, The small area is vast, The common heaven is sometimes mistaken, I think it is a worm guessed from the egg. The shell cracks, As soon as it comes out of the egg, A young blade of grass, A pine tree nest covered with leaves, When I see it, it is wide and wide, The land is called Nibbāna.

Through careful observation, knowledge, and understanding, I see the mountains, the trees, the sky, the rivers, the seas, the sun, the light, and the stars.

In the city of Sagara, I no longer believe in anything, In this strange world, I observe and observe that everything I see is strange. Because I am afraid of making the same mistake again. .//

Ko had a strange idea. But he didn't seem to be trying to be clear. It took a lot of patience to put together the "saw puzzle" just like a child putting together a jigsaw puzzle to make it look like a jigsaw puzzle. I read Ko's poem for the first time.

Then it seems to understand the meaning. It also appears to be pleasing. However, when reading the second, third, etc., doubts arise. For example - Dear friend, why do you use the word "bamboo"? Do you want to say that it is as wide as a temple? Do you want to say that it is as rich as a temple? If you want to say the latter, it is the same as what is commonly understood. If you want to say the former, it seems out of place. Because the temple is understood only in conjunction with spaciousness. The word "wide" and "land" are also used in the same way. Besides, for a small bird in an egg and a young bird, it is worth thinking about whether the temple and the nirvana are not too far away. After comparing the temple and the nirvana, the word "sagar" is added in the third stanza. It seems to say that the temple (nest) is wider than the temple (eggshell). The word "sagar" (sky) is wider than the nirvana. Is that right? What does sāgra mean? Does it mean the sea? If it does, why don't you use a word that is commonly understood? If the rhyme is too much,

It is easy to drift. Who is the leader among people? Who is the master? If you draw something, draw it again and again. In the end, you will succeed. I believe that if Ko (Yangon University) can reflect on this thought again and write it again, it will become stronger than the vision.//

Maung Aung (University) composes a poem that combines experience and thought. He uses various images to depict the restless minds of teenage boys and girls. It is lively. It moves. It appears.

teens

At that age, it became a source of attachment, uncertain, and uncertain.

Floating in the air, I see the stars in the clouds, I want to travel on the moon, I am not sure, the country is unstable. If you are able to move, you will be beautiful, if you want to be loved, you will be angry, if you come across it, you will cry and sing poems, with a smile, it is not eternal, life is not strong, like a cloud, it is not stable, it is too moving. You post

However, I feel that I am lacking in organizing, organizing, and using words to express my experiences and thoughts.

First, let's look at the word usage. When you make a sentence, you have a verb. If the verb is accurate, the meaning is clear. What does it mean to be attached, to be vague? Does the verb say that it is vague in order to make its meaning clear? In the sentence that says "I am not sure", the verb seems to be touching. However, //

What is the meaning of the word "sin lan yang"? If "sin lan yang" is used, what would happen if we wrote "sin lan yang" instead of "sin lan yang" in "tat tham ching yang"? How should we distinguish and understand "sin lan yang yang" and "bhav yang"? Or how should we understand it in relation to each other?

In the arrangement, there are points such as (1) He is like a flying butterfly. (2) He wants to take shelter in a train of clouds. (3) He wants to ride the moon. (4) He is unstable and moves around. (5) He dreams when he sees beauty. (6) He cries when he encounters sorrow. If he organizes points (1) and (4) as a pair, (2) and (3) as a pair, and (5) and (6) as a pair, he will be a person with his own destiny.

Of those three pairs, we should seriously consider which should be placed first, which second, and which third. But right now, it seems like chaos.

But (1) and (4) seem to agree. If they agree, one should be ruled out. In 4, the word "Kat" is "mind." In (1) there is no "Kat". This is a shortcoming.

The composition is like a horse with a sore leg running, uneven, and choppy. Since the poem aims to express the restlessness of teenagers through poetry, it should be composed in this way. But now, the poetry is so choppy that the readers are confused and lose focus.

I also noticed that there is a lot of greed in giving examples. In the case of the word "mua" (cloud), "mua" (cloud) is also "mua" (cloud), and "mua" (cloud) is also "mua". Only one word should be used sparingly in this type of verse. In metaphors, just as clouds are likened to chariots and the moon to stars, so too, if the star is likened to something, it must be perfectly consistent. It is very important to be balanced in composition.